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Subject: Re: [Leica] PAW - Week 4 - Slide One
From: Nathan Wajsman <wajsman@webshuttle.ch>
Date: Tue, 29 Jan 2002 06:26:59 +0100
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John,

Harsh comments forthcoming ;-)

> http://slideone.com/PAW2002/week04.02.html
> Self Crit: I like the group interaction on the left side of the frame and
> the single girl doing her thing in the mirror. The blur of the passers by
> gives a slight feeling of 'happening'. The poster in the upper right need a
> burn job. Overall it works ok for me.

This is not bad, except that there is no obvious center of interest. I would
like it better if all three girls in the center were turned toward the camera.
But I do like the blur of passers by.

> http://slideone.com/PAW2002/week04alt1.02.html
> Self Crit: The composition feel good to me but the small amount of emptiness
> in the center may bother me a little. I like the two foreground people w/o
> them the shot would be flat. I thought of a little crop along the top but
> seem to like how the various rectangle shapes (posters, light, and drawing)
> work together...

The foreground is the most interesting part of this picture, and you should
probably have focused close on these two people rather than taking in the entire
scene.

> http://slideone.com/PAW2002/week04alt2.02.html
> Self Crit: I think this shot would have worked better if I was up on a chair
> looking down a little. I like the pull on the polaroid but the arm blocking
> the camera is bothersome. A little profile of the photographers face might
> help too but I don't think totally necessary...

This is actually my favorite of these pictures. Not seeing the photographer's
face does not bother me.

> http://slideone.com/PAW2002/week04alt3.02.html
> Self Crit: The girl painting seems ok. I'm not sure of the lady in the BG.
> Showing a little more of the work area on the left might help too or panning
> the camera that way...

Here, I would lower the camera a bit (it seems like you are looking down on the
girl) and wait until the woman in the background disappeared.

Good job with the developing and scanning, BTW. You have retained detail in the
highlights with a 1600 film, well done!

Nathan

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